I am from learning to ride a bike in my house,
from the arms of Michael Jordan,
from toy photoshoots,
from Lincoln Ave.
I am from shedding bark trees,
from a yellow room,
from side walk chalk study guides,
from Hood Ave.
I am from Delton,
from candy dishes and ice cream sandwiches
from caged birds chirping,
from bright blue eyes.
I am from the deepest heart,
from the most drive,
from everywhere.
Alex,
ReplyDeleteI liked the interesting format you chose for your poem. Each line is nice and short and seems like a snapshot from one moment in your life. I think because they are so short, I was a little confused about a couple. For example, I wasn't sure what you meant by the "most drive" or that you were "from everywhere." You might consider clarifying a few of these and adding to them, or you could leave them purposefully elusive. Just a suggestion. Overall, I'd just like to know more details because each memory is really unique and specific.
Abby
Alex,
ReplyDeleteI really liked the format of your poem. I didnt think to do my poem like this but I think that having only a few "I am from" lines and then starting the rest underneath with just "from" made the poem very interesting to read. I also thought that keeping the poem short was very effective and makes the reader want to learn more about you. Good job!
Katie