Thursday, September 16, 2010

Where I'm From

I am from learning to ride a bike in my house,
        from the arms of Michael Jordan,
        from toy photoshoots,
        from Lincoln Ave.
I am from shedding bark trees,
        from a yellow room,
        from side walk chalk study guides,
        from Hood Ave.
I am from Delton,
        from candy dishes and ice cream sandwiches
        from caged birds chirping,
        from bright blue eyes.
I am from the deepest heart,
        from the most drive,
        from everywhere.


  1. Alex,
    I liked the interesting format you chose for your poem. Each line is nice and short and seems like a snapshot from one moment in your life. I think because they are so short, I was a little confused about a couple. For example, I wasn't sure what you meant by the "most drive" or that you were "from everywhere." You might consider clarifying a few of these and adding to them, or you could leave them purposefully elusive. Just a suggestion. Overall, I'd just like to know more details because each memory is really unique and specific.


  2. Alex,
    I really liked the format of your poem. I didnt think to do my poem like this but I think that having only a few "I am from" lines and then starting the rest underneath with just "from" made the poem very interesting to read. I also thought that keeping the poem short was very effective and makes the reader want to learn more about you. Good job!